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Response Done. The pileup is about 0.06 in pPb. The killing luminosity is about 3%. From simulation and data driven studies (details see AN-12-377 and AN-13-060), the efficiency of the pileup rejection is more than 92+/- 2%. This reduces the fraction of events with pileup from 3% to less than 0.3%. The filter was found to remove as few as 0.01% of events which contained only a single collision. The sentence with 99.9% was not accurate and is replaced with "The pileup-rejection efficiency is found to be 92 ± 2%, which is confirmed using a low pileup data sample.", similar to the CMS paper "Eur. Phys. J. C 75 (2015) 237". We indeed mean that the fraction of pileup events in the selected data is less much than 1%.

C6:line 113: That correction must be based on a model. Is it PYTHIA? I recommend to mention that here.

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Comment NO.4 (Yasar Onel, University of Iowa)

C1:Abstract:the CMS experiment-> the CMS detector.

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  C3:Line 93: the HF with more than 3 GeV of total energy is required for pPb collisions to furture remove-> I do not understand what do you mean by “furture”. I think you do not need to use this word here. I think there is a typo here, if not, please clarify.
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C5:Line 147: for pPb events are shown in Fig. 1. Please use “for pPb events” before the verb are.

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  C7:Line 187: This sentence is not a good sentence for the beginning of a paragraph. Could you please write a few sentences for the beginning before explaining the Tables. Or, you may move the paragraph (Lines 187-190) to below line 213.
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C2:It make sense to add a short description (an explanation) of the radial flow effect because there are several references to this effect. This description could be very short (in the same fashion as the description of the Cronin effect (see the paragraph started at line 34, page 1)).

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Comment NO.6 (Olga Evdokimov, University of Illinois at Chicago)

C1:l.2: "considered as a" -> "considered a"

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  C12:l.48 For better readability, please rephrase to “The radial flow is expected to be greater in the Pb-going than the p-going direction, and therefore to produce a stronger mass ordering on Pb-going side”
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  C15:Section 2: Consider using the recommended verbiage from https://twiki.cern.ch/twiki/bin/viewauth/CMS/Internal/PubDetector for the general CMS and HF descriptions, in addition to the tracker description.
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C29:l.120 Please specify what range you call an " appropriate invariant mass"l.125 "with respect to the primary vertex" ->" , with respect to the primary vertex,"

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C67:l.285-287 "With the efficiency corrected spectra, the nuclear modification factor of K0S, Λ, and Ξ− in −1.8 < yCM < 1.8, −1.8 < yCM < 0, and 0 < yCM < 1.8 are measured. "-> "The nuclear modification factors of K0S, Λ, and Ξ− in −1.8 < yCM < 1.8, −1.8 < yCM < 0, and 0 < yCM < 1.8 are measured using the efficiency corrected spectra."

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Comment NO.8 (Greg Landsberg, Brown University)

C1:Title: "multi-strange" is jargon, and it's not needed in the title at all; neither is the mention of CMS. Please, modify along the following lines: "Measurement of the nuclear modification factor of identified strange hadrons in pPb collisions a5.02 TeV ". In principle, "identified" could be dropped as well from the title - if you know they are strange hadrons, you have identified them.

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Can we really avoid citing Alice’s paper in Nature ? https://www.nature.com/nphys/journal/v13/n6/full/nphys4111.html. Around line 7, we should probably add that strangeness enhancement is also seen in high-multiplicity pp collisions.

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Comment NO.9 (Tatjana Susa, Rudjer Boskovic Institute)

Comment NO.10 (Sijin Qian, Peking University)

C1:Throughout the paper (including in Figure captions, legends and plotlabels, etc.), to be consistent with some good examples in this paper (e.g.Fig.1's caption and plot labels at the upper-left corner of each plot, etc.), an inequality can be shortened from "-1.8 < yCM < 1.8" -->"|yCM| < 1.8" The places where the shortenings can be made are L60, L62,L147,L220,L231,L233-234,Fig.2 (two legends (the 2nd lines), and in the caption (2nd and 4th lines)),L286,L288, and Fig.3 (the plot label at the upper-right corner and in the caption (the 2nd line)), etc.

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 C2:The first two lines, as the "pT" is used a few times in the Abstract, it should be explained at its 1st appearance in the Abstract on the 2nd line, i.e.

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 C3:The 8-9th lines, to be consistent in this Section (e.g. the 1st line and last three lines, etc.) and this paper, the spaces before and after three symbols of "+" should be removed, i.e.

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"RpPb(Omega-+Omega+) > RpPb (X-+X+) > RpPb (Lambda+Lambdabar)."

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 C4:

The 3rd line above the bottom, it may be slightly clearer if a comma is

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 C5:

L14 and L51, the "pT" should be explained at its appearance in text on L14,

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 C7:

L67, to be consistent with all other Section titles, the last word should

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 C8:

L137, a word of "and" and a comma may should be replaced by two words

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L223, a pair of brackets should be added to dissolve the ambiguities among

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 C10:

L266-269 and Fig.5's caption (the first 4 lines),

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 C12:

L286, L288 and L290. Per the guidelines of CMS PubComm, some acronyms

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 C13:

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 C1:Fig.3, in the caption, the 1st and 7th lines, to avoid any possible confusions with the "top" and "bottom" quarks, the position indicators may be better to be changed from "Figure 3: (Top) Nuclear modification factors of K0S (black filled circles), ...share the same color for each particle species. (Bottom) The ratios of ..."

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 C14:

L302, in [1], the word of "Review" in the article title may should be in

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 C15:

L304, in [3], to be consistent in this Section, two spaces before and

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 C16:

L307, in [4], to be consistent in this Section and this paper, the

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 C17:

L331, in [12], to be consistent in this Section, an extra index after the

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 C19:

The "year" number should be given for Ref.[24]. If there would be problems

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L390, in [32], to be consistent in this Section, the 1st name in the

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 C23:L426, in [45], to be consistent in this Section and this paper, the font of "pp" in the article title should be changed from

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Another one which also needs to be changed by the similar way is [49] for the "J" in the "J/psi".

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Comment NO.11 (Raphael Granier De Cassagnac, Centre National de la Recherche Scientifique)

C1:

At line 77, you should use the sentence “A more detailed description of the CMS detector, together with a definition of the coordinate system used and the relevant kinematic variables, can be found in Ref.~\cite{Chatrchyan:2008zzk}.", according to our guidelines.

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 C3:

Line 99, “the average pileup is approximately 0.9…” is unclear and should be very precisely defined (as you do for pPb at line 94). If 3% and 0.9 have the very same definition, then use 90% or 0.03.

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Line 145, should we define what this 10 are to avoid a possible confusion between 10% or 10 sigmas?

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 C5:

Tables 1 and 2, lines 195 and 197, you use the double dash −−for ranges, as mentioned in our guidelines. Also at line 207, 208, 212, please search for all occurrence.

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Unify your titles 6.1 and 6.2, either use words or symbols. We’d have a preference for “backward/forward asymmetry” at line 265.

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Comment NO.1 (Nikolay Tyurin, IHEP-Protvino)

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Response Done. The pileup is about 0.06 in pPb. The killing luminosity is about 3%. From simulation and data driven studies (details see AN-12-377 and AN-13-060), the efficiency of the pileup rejection is more than 92+/- 2%. This reduces the fraction of events with pileup from 3% to less than 0.3%. The filter was found to remove as few as 0.01% of events which contained only a single collision. The sentence with 99.9% was not accurate and is replaced with "The pileup-rejection efficiency is found to be 92 ± 2%, which is confirmed using a low pileup data sample.", similar to the CMS paper "Eur. Phys. J. C 75 (2015) 237". We indeed mean that the fraction of pileup events in the selected data is less much than 1%.

C6:line 113: That correction must be based on a model. Is it PYTHIA? I recommend to mention that here.

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  C7:line: 128: It took me a while to understand this sentence: do you mean here that the DCA significance of the line of flight of the V0, extrapolated backwards to the primary vertex, has to be less than 2.5? Then please write something like that. Same for line 142.
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  C8:line 209: how did we make these low and high pile up samples samples? There is not much pile-up in the data to start with (average is 0.9 only). what was done?
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  C9:line 212: is this reporting on a systematic check by comparing the positive p direction sample with the negative p direction sample? Then 5% is large is a large number, if this is statistically significant. How come we we have such a difference?
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 C10:line 223: the weight factor is the proper thing to add for presenting such data, as I did myself in a previous life (> 20 years ago smile ) but I forgot what was the origin of it?

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  C11:check line 226/ref [41]: does that refer to where the 70 mb is coming from? Did we (or somebody else like TOTEM) measure that or do we assume that (I forgot). I guess there is an uncertainty on that number... (we do use it here only as a scale factor of course).
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  C12:line 239: you mean constistent in a qualitative way? do we have any quantitative expectations from this models for our energy/particle species to compare with? (even if we do not reproduced these putative results on Fig3.)?
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  C13:line 242: For me this says that, except for low pT, EPOS clearly does not describe the data, even when you look at it in the ratio plot with the systematic error bands. That looks to me independent of whether there are such possible recombination effects.
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  C14:line 258: This is an important information which we should stress in the conclusions, even with the caveat in the next sentence.
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  C15:line 263 not sure I understood why this "the probed x-value of the nucleon is expected to be smaller in the nucleus than in a free proton". The parton density should be higher than in the free proton, but why <x> lower? Probably I miss something.
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C16:line 282: this observation is fine but can we think or speculate on where that comes from?

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  C17:line 296: EPOS: well, this works only for pT< a few GeV. Then the model clearly does not seem to describe the data.
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Comment NO.3 (Marc Besancon, Scalay)

C1:We like the introduction. Useful informations are given there for non cognoscenti and those not too familiar with the subject !

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  C2:L.223 not clear what you mean by this weighting 1/2 pi pT ? And its motivation is not clear either (it might be a current practice in the HIN community for which several of us are not too familiar with)
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  C3:L.229 are there uncertainties attached to this number <N_coll> = 6.9 from the Glauber simulation ?
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  C4:L.243 ".. is clearly smaller ..." : for the high pT range this seems to be an understatement. We find it "significantly" smaller. In view of figure 3 one would tend to conclude that EPOS does not describe the data especially not at all above ~5 GeV (or ~7 GeV for one of the hadron category).
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  C5:Same for Figure 4. EPOS does not seem to describe the data at all.
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  C6:L.258 It is said that the Cronin effect with parton mutiple scattering interpretation is inconsistent with data is it possible to be a bit more quantitative ?
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  C8:We agree with the corresponding statement in L.282 i.e. "...but fail to describe .."
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  C9:We would tend to also apply this "failure in the description" statement to the nuclear modification factor in figures 3 and 4.
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  C10:We wonder if there are other models than EPOS to compare with as EPOS does not seem to describe the data very well ?
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  C11:L.295-L.296"... consistent with the data ..." not too much convinced by this in view of figures 3 and 4.
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Comment NO.4 (Yasar Onel, University of Iowa)

C1:The texts above Figure 2 and 3 are out of shape. Please move the texts (TLatex) 1 or 2 cm to the left. Figure 2 must be located below Line 250. You can use [H] command in latex to locate the figure where you want. Figure 3 and 4 must be located above Section 6.2. Move the Figures 5 and 6 above the Section 7 (Summary)

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Comment NO.5 (Vassili Kachanov, IHEP)

C1:There is a question concerning the presentation of pT dependence (see Figure 2). In the page 7, line 230-231, there is a phrase: "... For purpose of better visibility, spectra for different y CM ranges are scaled by factors of 10^n , with − 1.8 < y CM < 1.8 not scaled."

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 The points in these plots are presented the spectra for negative y_CM (-1.8 < y_CM < 0, blue points), multiplied by factor of 10, and for the positive y_CM ("red"), divided by 10.

Therefore, one should expect that the sum of the "blue" spectra times by 10 and the red ones times by 1/10 should be equal to "black" ones. However, it is seen from these figures that the "blue" spectra times by 10 and the "red" ones times by 1/10 are approximately equal to "black" points. Therefore, the sum of these spectra would be two times lager than "black" ones !

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Comment NO.6 (Olga Evdokimov, University of Illinois at Chicago)

C1:There is very little description of the physics results and/or conclusions in the abstracts at the moment (other than that the data is compared to EPOS). Please synchronize the statements with those in the summary, where description of the results is much more explicit.

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C4:l.59 “hereafter referred to as Xi^- “ – it is common to use just Xi and Omega (with no “–“) for both combined-charge measurement; it is confusing to re-designate Xi- for (Xi- +Xi+)

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  C5:l.102 “the efficiency with respect to the inelastic events” -> please specify efficiency of what (presumably, vertex reconstruction + event selection cuts; it is not clear if vertex finding efficiency is included in or not)
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C6:l.114 “The values of RpPb will decrease by 3-6% if pPb spectra are corrected to inelastic collisions.” – the previous sentence states that the corrections ARE applied; while “will decrease .. if ” seem to state that they are not. Which is it?? If the corrections are in, please change to “The values of RpPb decrease by 3-6% when pPb spectra are corrected to inelastic collisions” or clarify the sentence before this one.

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  C7:l.128: When you refer to the 3D DCA significance of the V0 candidate, is this the 3D DCA significance of both daughter tracks? Or the 3D DCA of the reconstructed V0 trajectory? Same for L142.
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  C8:l.139: Is this selection in addition to the Lambda selection described earlier? If so, isn’t the proton track already required to have 3D DCA significance larger than 2?
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  C9:l.235: R_pPb for Lambda does not actually seem consistent with 1 at 7 TeV by eye. How significant is the difference?
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  C10:l.242 “even stronger mass ordering” -> “even stronger mass dependence” (“ordering” is binary (either there or not), it cannot be “stronger”)
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  C11:l.242-244: R_pPb is only shown to be smaller in simulation compared to data at high pt for mesons, since the baryon data does not extend to high pt -- please clarify this in the text
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  C13:l.250 “and expected from both the radial flow and nuclear shadowing effects” -> “and could be attributed to both, the radial flow and nuclear shadowing, effects” (since you can’t tell which one, rather than have a precise calculation that it has to be some combination of the two)
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C1:L150: When you say “weighted average”, how is this weighted? Is it by the normalisations of the Gaussian components?

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  C3:L193-195 : I’m rather confused as to what this systematic is meant to represent. When you say “in the signal region”, do you mean just counting events in a window (of what size?) around the peak and subtracting background? If this number is similar enough, then what is the need of the fit?. How do the uncertainties on those two approaches compare?
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  C4:Fig 2 caption: Please refer to the PubComm guidelines for describing horizontal and vertical error bars on points : https://twiki.cern.ch/twiki/bin/view/CMS/Internal/PubGuidelines#Commas (look in the “Uncertainty vs. error paragraph) - same goes for Figs 3 - 6
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Comment NO.8 (Greg Landsberg, Brown University)

C1:L10-11: move Refs. [12,13] to the end - those are not about jet quenching, but about non observation of this effect in pPb collisions!

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Comment NO.9 (Tatjana Susa, Rudjer Boskovic Institue)

C1:From the comparison of the EPOS LHC model (with collective flow in pp and pPb collisions) to the data in Figs. 3 and 4, it is clear that model does not describe the data (except at low pt).

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Comment NO.11 (Raphael Granier De Cassagnac, Centre National de la Recherche Scientifique)

C1:

We find the notation of particle+antiparticle rather heavy in the abstract, and would prefer using the condensed notation that is used in the figures and everywhere in the text. This being said, we notice that both conventions were unfortunately used in HIN abstracts in the past (https://arxiv.org/abs/1605.06699 and https://arxiv.org/abs/1508.06678)

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Can we really avoid citing Alice’s paper in Nature ? https://www.nature.com/nphys/journal/v13/n6/full/nphys4111.html. Around line 7, we should probably add that strangeness enhancement is also seen in high-multiplicity pp collisions.

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C2:It make sense to add a short description (an explanation) of the radial flow effect because there are several references to this effect. This description could be very short (in the same fashion as the description of the Cronin effect (see the paragraph started at line 34, page 1)).

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  C1:line 151: Geant4 is written in the wrong format for what we usually do in CMS papers. (HI papers do seem to ignore this smile ) Please check a recent pp paper. ps: we use: \newcommand{\GEANTfour} {{\textsc{Geant4}}\xspace}
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  C1:It make sense to add "in pPb collisions" in one phrase in the Abstract: "... In addition, the asymmetries in the K0S and Lambda+Lambda_bar yields between equivalent positive and negative ...
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  C1:Title: "multi-strange" is jargon, and it's not needed in the title at all; neither is the mention of CMS. Please, modify along the following lines: "Measurement of the nuclear modification factor of identified strange hadrons in pPb collisions a5.02 TeV ". In principle, "identified" could be dropped as well from the title - if you know they are strange hadrons, you have identified them.
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  C1:Throughout the paper (including in Figure captions, legends and plotlabels, etc.), to be consistent with some good examples in this paper (e.g.Fig.1's caption and plot labels at the upper-left corner of each plot, etc.), an inequality can be shortened from "-1.8 < yCM < 1.8" -->"|yCM| < 1.8" The places where the shortenings can be made are L60, L62,L147,L220,L231,L233-234,Fig.2 (two legends (the 2nd lines), and in the caption (2nd and 4th lines)),L286,L288, and Fig.3 (the plot label at the upper-right corner and in the caption (the 2nd line)), etc.
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  C1:The Introduction is clear and comprehensive. As a comment:it would be useful to add discussion on the qualitative dependence on centrality of the three mentioned effects, namely, radial flow, Cronin enhancement and nuclear shadowing.
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Response Detailed discussions are in each subsection of the Result section. In the Summary section, we already have these sentences: "Cronin-like enhancements are visible and clear mass ordering is observed, being consistent with expectations from a radial-flow effect in hydrodynamic models." and "The calculated trend of $R_\mathrm{\pPb}$ for different particle species in the \EPOSLHC model including collective flow is consistent with the data, but the model fails to describe the particle-species dependence of $y_\mathrm{CM}$ in the forward rapidity." The collective effects are observed before in small systems, but only in the high-multiplicity region. This paper presents both low- and high-multiplicity regions, and study the RpPb of the strange particles.
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  C1:We have published a paper on strange hadron production last year, including pPb data. We should somehow say what is new here for this study (eg the pT spectra, the asymmetry study...?)
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  C1:We like the introduction. Useful informations are given there for non cognoscenti and those not too familiar with the subject !
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  C1:The texts above Figure 2 and 3 are out of shape. Please move the texts (TLatex) 1 or 2 cm to the left. Figure 2 must be located below Line 250. You can use [H] command in latex to locate the figure where you want. Figure 3 and 4 must be located above Section 6.2. Move the Figures 5 and 6 above the Section 7 (Summary)
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  C1:There is a question concerning the presentation of pT dependence (see Figure 2). In the page 7, line 230-231, there is a phrase: "... For purpose of better visibility, spectra for different y CM ranges are scaled by factors of 10^n , with − 1.8 < y CM < 1.8 not scaled."
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  C1:There is very little description of the physics results and/or conclusions in the abstracts at the moment (other than that the data is compared to EPOS). Please synchronize the statements with those in the summary, where description of the results is much more explicit.
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  C1:L10-11: move Refs. [12,13] to the end - those are not about jet quenching, but about non observation of this effect in pPb collisions!
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  C1:From the comparison of the EPOS LHC model (with collective flow in pp and pPb collisions) to the data in Figs. 3 and 4, it is clear that model does not describe the data (except at low pt).
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C15:line 263 not sure I understood why this "the probed x-value of the nucleon is expected to be smaller in the nucleus than in a free proton". The parton density should be higher than in the free proton, but why <x> lower? Probably I miss something.

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  C2:l.27 “indicate that final state effects, such as those from the recombination models [27–29],” – the references 27-29 are misleading here. None of these cited works talk about a importance of the recombination in the d+Au (or p+Pb for that matter) collisions, which the text, as worded, may seem to imply. These have to be moved to l. 15, where recombination is first mentioned, and not be attached to this statement.
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  C3:General comment, somewhat related to above: the introduction makes a rather strong emphasis on recombination, making a reader to expect that some new findings presented later will shed a light on wherever it is important for particle production in pPb. The results presented, and, more important, their discussion makes no strong conclusions (if at all) in that regard (however, discussions on other mechanisms are quite detailed and interesting). This smears a bit the impression from the paper, and would be best if it could be de-emphasized.
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  C4:l.59 “hereafter referred to as Xi^- “ – it is common to use just Xi and Omega (with no “–“) for both combined-charge measurement; it is confusing to re-designate Xi- for (Xi- +Xi+)
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  C6:l.114 “The values of RpPb will decrease by 3-6% if pPb spectra are corrected to inelastic collisions.” – the previous sentence states that the corrections ARE applied; while “will decrease .. if ” seem to state that they are not. Which is it?? If the corrections are in, please change to “The values of RpPb decrease by 3-6% when pPb spectra are corrected to inelastic collisions” or clarify the sentence before this one.
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C1:Throughout the paper (including in Figure captions, legends and plotlabels, etc.), to be consistent with some good examples in this paper (e.g.Fig.1's caption and plot labels at the upper-left corner of each plot, etc.), an inequality can be shortened from "-1.8 < yCM < 1.8" -->"|yCM| < 1.8" The places where the shortenings can be made are L60, L62,L147,L220,L231,L233-234,Fig.2 (two legends (the 2nd lines), and in the caption (2nd and 4th lines)),L286,L288, and Fig.3 (the plot label at the upper-right corner and in the caption (the 2nd line)), etc.

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Comment NO.11

C1:

At line 77, you should use the sentence “A more detailed description of the CMS detector, together with a definition of the coordinate system used and the relevant kinematic variables, can be found in Ref.~\cite{Chatrchyan:2008zzk}.", according to our guidelines.

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