Deliverable Review Form
Identification of the deliverable or milestone |
Project: EMI |
Deliverable or milestone identifier: D2.3.3 |
Title: DNA2.3.3 - Dissemination and Use of Knowledge Plan |
Doc. identifier: EMI-DXXX-CDSREF-Title-vx.x |
Author(s): E. Giorgio |
Due date: 30/04/13 |
Identification of the reviewer |
Name: A. Di Meglio |
Affiliation: CERN |
EMI Activity/External project or Institute: NA1 |
Review date |
17/05/2013 |
Author(s) revision date |
mm/dd/yyyy |
Reviewer acceptance date |
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Attach the reviewed document to the deliverable page, put here a link
General comments
I went through the document and I think everything is there. I added some comments in the text for you to consider. However:
1) The sustainability section must be expanded, it's really too short
2) A number of statement needs to be substantiated. When you say "increase", "several", "many", etc. put numbers of references.
2) The English language must be revised, there are many sentences difficult to understand or with "grammatically challenged" constructs
I can do another pass, when you have fixed this. There are a couple of places where I ask for more info, but I'm aware you do not have it yet (for example the video we are producing now). Leave it as it is for now, we will try to fix it as soon as possible.
Additional recommendations (not affecting the document content, e.g. recommendation for future work)
Detailed comments on the content
Note 1: The reviewers must list here any observation they want to track explicitly and that require interaction with the authors
Alternatively all changes must be listed in the document itself using Word change tracking features (if you use Word)
Note 2: These comments have to be explicitly addressed by the authors and the action taken must be clearly described
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Any other modification, spelling or grammatical corrections, etc must be done directly in the document using tracked changes or similar mechanisms that allows the authors to identify which correction is suggested.