NA2 Deliverable Review Form

Identification of the deliverable or milestone
Project: EMI Deliverable or milestone identifier: D1.3.2
Title: DNA1.3.2 - Technical Development Plan Doc. identifier: EMI-DXXX-CDSREF-Title-vx.x
Author(s): B. Konya Due date: __

Identification of the reviewer
Name: D. Cresti Affiliation: INFN EMI Activity/External project or Institute: NA2

Review date 25/05/2011
Author(s) revision date mm/dd/yyyy
Reviewer acceptance date mm/dd/yyyy

Attach the reviewed document to the deliverable page, put here a link

General comments

Very good document, which again, should be publicized more widely. It would be easier for the reader, and more interesting, if it contained stronger tie-ins with DNA1.3.1. See comments.

Additional recommendations (not affecting the document content, e.g. recommendation for future work)

We should think of publishing parts of this deliverable in an easy to access place.

Detailed comments on the content

Note 1: The reviewers must list here any observation they want to track explicitly and that require interaction with the authors
Alternatively all changes must be listed in the document itself using Word change tracking features (if you use Word)
Note 2: These comments have to be explicitly addressed by the authors and the action taken must be clearly described

N Page Section Observations and Replies Is Addressed?
1 5 1.1 I would make explicit reference to DNA1.3.1 and the fact that this document updates the plan as outlined in this document    
2 9 2 Add some considerations on how the technical plan has evolved since DNA1.3.1; what aspects of that document have remained solid, any important changes, any lessons learned.    
3 16 4 Is it possible to highlight in the product table any important deviations from the plan in the DNA1.3.1 component table - e.g. with a shaded cell; or changes in status with respect to the earlier table. I do see some products were phased out. A few high-level considerations comparing the two tables would be good; if the comparison between tables shows overall progress against objectives, say so - e.g. the plan in DNA1.3.1 was well thought-out and the current product table can be compared to the earlier component table to see progress that has been made.    
4 23 5.1 "The EMI products, many of them to be available as grid appliances deployable in cloud environments,..." please provide a reference to justify this statement.    
5 23 5.1 "The second development phase, EMI-2, will complete the work on consolidation plans already started and unfortunately not concluded in year 1..." I would change this to "The second development phase, EMI-2, will complete the work on any consolidation plans already started and not concluded in year 1..." (remove "unfortunately")    
6 34 6 "This deliverable is the second revision of the technical plan..." Please remind the reader what other revision preceded this. I thought DNA1.3.1 was the technical plan and DNA1.3.2 is the first revision of this plan.    

Any other modification, spelling or grammatical corrections, etc must be done directly in the document using tracked changes or similar mechanisms that allows the authors to identify which correction is suggested.

-- FloridaEstrella - 06-May-2011

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