NA2 Deliverable Review Form

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General comments

• In general, this document does not give a clear high-level view of how the development plan has evolved from it's two previous incarnations. There are some important changes discussed in section 4.1, which are buried among tables of data. There is also very little explicit presentation of the EMI vision in terms of the technical objectives. Here a few lines on the new vision objectives established a few months ago would be good.

• 21/05 Balazs: As it is stated in the executive summary, this version of the tech plan is an update, not an extension of the previous ones. My goal was to update all the data, tables that the previous version contained. This is project working document in the sense that the tables carry the relevant important informations and that data must be up-to-date. Actually, my very first idea was to simple take a snapshot of the EMI dev tracker and PT tables and submit those as the deliverable (this i turned down . Regarding the changes of the dev plan, i'd point your attention to Section 4.2 that i believe gives a summary of the changes (especially the 2nd paragraph). Regarding the presentation of the changes of the EMI vision due to new requirements this i'd say is captured in the updated Section 4.1 for the Monte Bianco release. The paragraph "During the third, final phase.." has been largely rewritten and needless to say all the changes that were made in the workplan is the result of new requirements. to summarize: for me the criticized tables constitute the real value of this deliverable.

• This document is the right place to show at a high level how the EMI development plan has responded to user feedback and requirements. One or two suggestive examples would help.

• 21/05 Balazs: The addition of the new objectives in the objective table and the entire requirements table with the "endorsed" requirements supposed to show exactly this. These tables contain lots of examples, i don't think any additional text should be added.

• The text in section 3 can be improved, to better highlight important evolutions and wherever possible the rationale for the decisions made.

• 21/05 Balazs: Section 3 is the "products and PTs" section. Unfortunately (or fortunately?, there was not much evolution with respect to EMI products. I don't really understand this general comment (i'll see and respond in the doc file for every specific note)

• Within the sections of the document, I would include a brief text highlighting all important aspects of the tables presented - changes in particular, and where possible a line on the motivations for these changes.

• 21/05 Balazs: I believe the introductory texts preceding the tables (e.g. Section 4.2 text before the objectives) already do this.
• See also comments in the attached file.

• 21/05 Balazs: See my comments on your comments in the attached file. Smaller corrections were directly accepted in my "master" document v0.7

Additional recommendations (not affecting the document content, e.g. recommendation for future work)

Detailed comments on the content

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-- FloridaEstrella - 03-May-2012