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Identification of the deliverable or milestone
Project: EMI Deliverable or milestone identifier: DNA2.1.1
Title: Collaboration Programs Doc. identifier: EMI-DNA2.1.1-CDSREF-Collaboration-Programs-v1.1
Author(s): Diana Cresti (NA2, INFN) Due date: PM1 (May 2010)

Identification of the reviewer
Name: Alberto Di Meglio Affiliation: CERN EMI Activity: NA1

Review date 11/08/2010
Author(s) revision date mm/dd/yyyy
Reviewer acceptance date mm/dd/yyyy

Reviewed document


General comments

The current version of the document gives only limited information about the collaboration programs. It lists a number of potential collaborating partners, but lacks a more detailed description of the overall collaboration strategies, the individual collaboration programs, the communication channels and instruments and especially the expectations and long term vision. There should be less focus on individual projects and more information about the EMI aspects of establishing collaborations programs. There should also be some description of how the collaboration outcomes are monitored in order to fulfil the stated expectations. The reader should not be left with hanging questions of the type: "Ok, you will do this, and so what?"

The document is a in places a bit unbalanced towards EGEE, there is little mention of ARC and UNICORE and their existing or planned collaboration partners.

Additional recommendations (not affecting the document content, e.g. recommendation for future work)

The first instance of this series of deliverables should be a plan, while the following instances should report on the execution of the plan and the achievements, in addition to any revision or improvement on the original plan.

Detailed comments on the content

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Note 3: All replies below by -- DianaC - 09-Dec-2010

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1 5 1.1 The text states that a full list of collaborations will be put on the web site. Where is it? It would be better to have it in place before submitting the document and put here the actual link, also because the document also states that there are continuing collaborations inherited from previous projects I removed this text for this iteration of the deliverable.  
2 5 1.2 Revise description of section 3 after we clarify in more details what the program is about Done  
3 6 1.4 The person allowed to amend the document should not be a generic “author”, but a precise role, like the “NA2 WP Leader” or the “Dissemination Officer”. The author may change. That’s why in my opinion a generic amendment rule referenced in all documents doesn’t work. Every deliverable has specific owners and rules. Done  
4 7 2 I’m not sure this Executive Summary really summarizes the document. An Exec Summary should describe in plain terms the key points of the document in the same order as they appear in the text and describe the main pre-conditions and expectations. In principle, it should allow a person to tell what’s in the document without reading it. In this case, I’m not sure I could be able to talk about the content of the doc just by reading this. The usual length of a standard ES is about 1/10 of the length of the doc, therefore you can extend it to a full page I wrote a new Executive summary  
5 7 2 Why saying that the categorization is a matter of convenience? The categorization has a specific purpose, to create the right frameworks for different entities to work with us. There will certainly be exceptions, but this should not be just for convenience, but to clearly identify the right targets, the right communications channels and the expected outcomes for each type of collaboration Completely rewritten this part  
6 8 3 I would not say "collaborations at Month 1". This is our plan and must define the collaboration strategy for the rest of the project even if it will certainly be revised and adjusted as we go. The document is not about describing the names, which can change, but rather the concepts, strategies and expectations, which should change less frequently Ok, rewritten  
7 8 3 Same as before. This is a plan. It must describe what we want to do, how we want to do it, what we plan to give and what we expect to get. It must be more that a “statement of intention” Ok, see new Section 3  
8 8 3 Before moving into the description of the collaboration categories, I suggest to put everything into context. You should describe what is the reason to establish collaborations, what types of targets we have identified, how the collaboration programs will be managed and monitored, etc, etc. After that, you will be able to state why we have defined the three collaboration categories and proceed to describe them in details Ok, see the executive summary and the introduction to Section 3  
9 8 3.1 I’d like to see more high-level details on what this category of collaboration is about, how it will be managed, what are the expected results, what communication channels will be used, etc. After that you can give specific examples and mention EGI and the others. For the moment, this section is a list of projects, but it doesn’t say anything about the collaboration program itself Ok, see new sect 3  
10 8 3.1.1 You mention "exceptions". What exceptions? If you state this, you should also clarify what the issues are and what actions are being taken to solve them Ok, rewritten  
11 9 3.1.2 Remove "Networks", we do not have any specific relationship I can think of for the moment Ok  
12 10 3.2 Same comment as fot the previous category. I’d like to see a description of the collaboration program and it’s mechanisms and expectations, rather than a list of projects or communities Ok, see new sect 3  
13 10 3.2 You state that EMI will inherit the existing collaborations. This is unclear. When? Which ones? Are there MoUs in place already? Will existing MoUs be extended I rephrased this part, see section 5. I did not mention any current MoUs  
14 10 3.2 "Several NA2 tasks have specific plans to organize events". Where are these plan described? Mention the relevant deliverables or web pages where this is described I removed references to this, aside from what is in the notes on the DCI roadmap  
15 10 3.2.1 I don’t really see any continuing collaborations here. Some of these projects have ended and so far after three months into the project I haven’t heard of any collaboration action. As we have discussed, it's probably better to remove the wording "continuing collaborations" as the title of a specific section unless you can give practical information about how the collaborations have been migrated to EMI and how they are now organized Ok, removed  
16 11 3.2.2 As for the other two categories above. Describe the collaboration program, not the individual projects Ok, removed the projects, the program itself is introduced in sect 3  
17 11 3.2.2 The content of this section is too specific. You should talk about the ESFRI projects in general, not about a single topic. ELIXIR is described in excessive details, there is no mention of fundamental communities like WLCG or FUSION Ok, section is more general now  
18 13 3.3 Please refer to the separate document sent to the PEB that describe this program and its expectations I incorporated the contents of that document in section 6  
19 14 4 This section doesn't really say very much. It should describe the next steps: how will the programs be put in place? How will they be monitored and reported in future deliverables? What are the next steps? OK, new conclusion provided  
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