NA1 Deliverable Review Form

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v.0.4.1 with Florida's comments

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N°	Page	Section	Observations and Replies	Is Addressed?
1	xx	x.y	Sequence of comments and replies separated by twiki signature and date
1			What is missing is a section or chapter on user base analysis and audience identification -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 It is stated in executive summary that main target of dissemination efforts are communities establishing DCI's. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
2	10	3.2.6	Specify clearly the NA2 strategy on content acquisition, specially for technical areas -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
3	12	4.1.1	Expand this section to include technical details about the conf , specially the ones relevant to EMI. eg technical track/themes ; do we have a training plan organised? how many EMI-related abstracts submitted? in ops? in mw dev? etc -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
4	13	4.1.2	What is missing is a clear plan for Year 2 outreach event – when, where, how -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Not fully addressable for us, reason explained through the text. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
5	15	4.2.4-5	424 and 425 are SC-related events. What about more HTC-centric event? OGF? ISGC 2011 – EMI has several presentations; and also chairing a session -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
6	16	4.3	Metrics should not be limited to Events – it should be applied to all areas of dissemination and outreach. Also clearly identify critical success factors. Refer to EGEE-III doc https://edms.cern.ch/file/955220/4/EGEE-III-DNA2_3-955220_v7.pdf -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done, added a new section (7). -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
7	17	5.2	Could the ‘Work with EMI’ progamme (and its stamp) be considered a branding strategy? You can find the stamp @ https://twiki.cern.ch/twiki/bin/view/EMI/EmiCollaborationPrograms -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
8	20	6.2	You can expand on this by taking the MoU-related text, including associated milestones -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
9			Can we include a 'Setting the scene' section describing the NA2 dissemination team, mw contacts - and responsibilities -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Dissemination activities are now better described, with the contact info for each of the activity. -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
10			Missing section: Dissemination and Outreach to Business Communities -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done (section 8). Done (section 8).-- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
11			Could an implemantion plan, similar to the EGEE-III implementation plan @ https://edms.cern.ch/file/955220/4/EGEE-III-DNA2_3-955220_v7.pdf be implemented -- FloridaEstrella - 11-Jan-2011 Done. (section 7) -- EmidioG - 20-Jan-2011
12	7	2	Suggest to review the formulation of the Exec Summary; currently reads like extended Doc Structure -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done, reference to text have been minimized. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
13	7	2	"Main target of dissemination activities are thus communities that establishes DCIs" maybe establish is not the intended word? -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 It was inserted by the other reviewer, and I think is appropriate. Any suggestion ? -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011		ignore
14	8	3.1.1	Align numbered list; replace bullets with numbers -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
15	12	3.2.6	"The strategy is to plan in advance a series of contributions" This section could be improved by clearly specifying who-does-what-when for the next 3,6,12 months -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
16	12	3.3.4	Can you include some analysis of the G. Analytics numbers eg peak in nov can be explained by the 1st AHM -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
17	16	4.1	Organisation of events Missing - already organised events - EMI KO, EMI AHM (although internal I think these should be added, see related milestone for text) EMI TC in addition to giving emphasis to meet the experts (1st parag), suggest to give emphasis to the tutorials as well suggest to remove "Should meanwhile the release not be ready" or replace with "the TC will be the occasion to discuss the critical issues and improvements for future releases..." suggest to rename the tracks ff the suggestions sent to PEB suggest to remove "For instance, training sessions about installation of EMI components.." we do not need to expose poor oversight on EMI side. suggest to remove "presumably to correspond with the middleware previews .." -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 DoW states that KO & AHM are NA1 pertinence, and NA2 contribute has been limited indeed. Suggested statements have been changed. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
18	17	4.1.2	Is the CERN event the one related to QA/SA2? If yes, then this is inreach not outreach. -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Fixed. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
19	17	4.1.2	"a survey to better understand the needs of user" Would it be possible to specify when this survey will go out? Concrete Y2 outreach plan is missing who-does-what-when for the next 3,6,12 months? -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done.-- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
20	18	4.2	4.2.1-4.2.4 refer to past events; 4.2.5-4.2.6 to future events 3 future events, 2 of which are HPC-centric, do not bode well with our event planning. In Y1 EMI participated @ NorduGrid Conf, UNICORE Summit, EGI TF, CHEP, ISGC. Why are these not included in past events? Why some of these are not included in future events? -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Events are sort chronologically. ISGC'10 was before EMI KO. Reported events are those supported/organised by NA2; Nordugrid, UNICORE Summit have been included among evaluating events. Done. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
21	20	4.2.8	"other environments and events that could be worth to attend in the coming 2011" this gives the reader the impression we have no/limited event planning for 2011. -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 It would be true if there were not confirmed events. Since there are, this just give an idea of flexibility. -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
22	23	6-6.1-6.1	"To this extent a list of ESFRI has been accomplished and is now being investigated" include list of ESFRIs being investigated and Y2 plan on how these initiatives will be approached "Contacts with some specific press of the computing/grid/cloud sector have been made in order to start a collaboration" Can we include specifics? 6.1.1 plan ends with EMI-1 release, what is the plan the the rest of Y2? 6.1.2 past event; missing Y2 joint dissemination event planning -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done-- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
23	25	7	Missing factor - effective communication between the project (or between NA2 and EMI members) table 1 should include future implementation plan; if what has been done is also included, can I suggest have 2 tables (past, future) Update table 1/2 with new modifications resulting from recommendations above to include in table 1/2 (as separate rows): inreach, outreach, event participation, event organisation, joint dissemination with other projects if table row also reflects KPI, indicate KPI number -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done. Instead of two tables, columns have been adding, where values can be compared-- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
24	26	7.1	For clarity and completeness, include the NA2 KPIs here -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Done -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011
25	27	8	", as seen e.g. during demos at the SuperComputing events " expand, include links to EMI-related demos "in past collaborations with private companies" expand, include links/more info to EMI's past collaboration with private companies past - we have had links with Google, Redhat - can we include that or refer to another deliverable for more info future - clear Y2 plans on how to reach business comms Cloud computing WF - why is this not part of the future events ? -- FloridaEstrella - 26-Jan-2011 Removed statements without supporting reference. CCWF added to possible future events -- EmidioG - 11-Feb-2011

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-- FloridaEstrella - 04-Jan-2011