Comments by Katja:

- lines 34/44: "Therefore the annealing behavior the signal" --> "Therefore the annealing behavior of the signal"
- line 104: "the neutron fraction of particles increases" : this would read better to me as "the neutron fraction increases"
- Fig. 4, caption: a space seems to be missing in the first line, before "of"
- lines 126, 127: I would not start a new paragraph here. Instead I would start a new paragraph at line 130, when you start to discuss the annealing (maybe there is a new paragraph and it is not visible because of how the line 129 ends)
- Table 4, caption: reshuffle in the last sentence like this: "The highest fluence from Table 3 in the default (ultimate) scenario is xxx (yyy) for the 2S region and AAA (BBB) for the PS region."
- line 135: comma before "while"
- Table 5: I noticed this here, but it seems to affect several tables: you have bold text font in the title line (heading). However, the text that is probably set in mathmode is not bold, so here for instance "23 MeV". In some tables it could be on purpose (Table 4), but here it looks wrong. Also in Table 3 the "z" is affected.
- line 296: comma after "each"
- Table 11: the table is wider than the text, can you try to fix this be shortening (perhaps "ann." ?)
- line 395: "dependence of the annealing time" --> "dependence on the annealing time"
- line 545: "Since both two sensor thicknesses" --> "Since both sensor thicknesses"
- line 538: spurios spacing before the full-stop
- sometimes in the references you have a comma before the url, sometimes a full-stop. It may depend on the bibtex category, if it cannot be fixed it is not a disaster.



Comments by Lenny:

L13: provision of tracking -> tracking information
L14: Delete "while limiting the trigger rate" as this is implied by "to efficiently select interesting events"
L33: Remove the comma after "current increases"
L57: with a thickness -> with an active thickness
L71: main aspects -> main considerations
L103" and all particles also including -> and an ``all particles'' category that also includes
L135: 30 weeks are still considered plausible -> up to 30 weeks is still a possibility
L147: and similar procedures are applied -> and similar procedures were applied (tense consistency in paragraph)
L161: the procedures are described which were -> the procedures are described that were
Tab6: measurement functionS
L182: Remove the comma after "daughterboard"
L186: ramp from 300 V to 900 V -> ramp from 300 to 900 V
L193: The double quotes in "Eq. time at +21C" are non-standard
L295: also four full-size FZ290 sensors have been irradiated -> four full-size FZ290 sensors were also irradiated
L324: be written as follows: -> be written:
L342: The power system, module design[,] and quality control
Fig19: pink -> magenta
       The quotation marks surrounding "short" and "long" are non-standard
Fig20: Same comments as for Fig. 19